Hey you asked for suggestions
That's a lot better, although (I'm not sure about the correct vocab for audio so bare with me here) it sounds like there are two "growling" tracks been played, I hear your voice, but it also sounds like another Kat is just growling into the mic at the same time.
Also, I like the last one there buddy....that wasn't intended to be a taunt but I see you recorded it anyways
well, honestly most of the wc3 kilrathi dialogue sounds like either Tim Curry or John Rhys Davies growling the lines into the mic with lion growls added over top.
I remember from the Heart of the Tiger novelization, that the incoming audio voice is actually a real time computer translation of the original Kilrathi comm. In my imagination, the end result would probably be a bit unlike the one we hear in the games, don't you think?