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. I'm really enjoying the story so far, the references to all the other WC sources is fun and the attack on the transports is so reminiscent of Seethers attack in the opening of WC4. But there are a few things that bothered me.
The transports are Dorkir? This was a Kilrathi Assembly of Clans operation and they are gonna use a half-century old transport? I don't think they would employ these any longer but who knows?
"But Brax was now beware of those without honor" - aware?
If you are gonna be using the old Dorkir transport, you probably wouldn't need so many torpedoes (hell you wouldn't need torpedoes at all) to do the job.
"While the supercarrier was a veritable powerhouse, it certainly did not pack the same punch as the Midway" - the Vesuvius packs more punch than the Midway. It carries more fighters, more heavy engagement weapons, more armor, etc.
The Caernaven is a frigate and would have probably been long retired by now (it was old in WC4).
You may have created a problem by putting Casey onboard a Vesuvius carrier. You seem to be mixing the duties of CAG (a Navy post IIRC) and the Wing Commnder. Also, on a Vesuvius, Casey would be 1 of 4 Wing Commanders. His wing wouldn't be the only ones called upon to do the work.
You're gonna task Vampires and Devastators to go after a single half-century old cruiser task force? Sounds more like Panther and Shrike IMHO. Plus, the bad guys aren't the only ones who have cloaking technology now. Caseys wing could take advantage of that fact when attacking the task force, or when he's being hounded by missiles/fighters
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"threw a salute to his grinning fighter captain, who " - I'm not really sure, but is the chief tech of a fighter called its "captain"?
"At Nav 2, the Jefferson had been targeted by a flight of Dralthi IVs, with several Shok’lars in reserve" - unless they've been retrofitted to carry torps, there is no reason for them to even engage a Plunkett, or the plunkett to even be slowed by their attack.
They don't have enough fuel to go after the Dralthis, but they do to go ahead with the patrol to maybe mix it up at another nav point? Seems if they were that low, they'd bail on hitting the last nav and head for home.
Caseys wing actually failed the mission (letting some of the enemy escape) and there was no subsequent conversation with the Captain?
Anyway, just some things I saw that lept to my attention. Great story, keep it up
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C-ya