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Another section? I'm not sure what you mean. It's already separated into the event it occurs (Baka Kar). It's the breakdown of what Bear does during the battle. I wouldn't want to create another article just for it to show what he was doing when it can be effectively displayed here. Is that what you meant or did I misunderstand? --[[User:Dundradal|Dundradal]] 16:26, 20 August 2010 (CDT) | Another section? I'm not sure what you mean. It's already separated into the event it occurs (Baka Kar). It's the breakdown of what Bear does during the battle. I wouldn't want to create another article just for it to show what he was doing when it can be effectively displayed here. Is that what you meant or did I misunderstand? --[[User:Dundradal|Dundradal]] 16:26, 20 August 2010 (CDT) | ||
: I was thinking of seperating it into another heading section - you're using level 2 headers for the whole article, so that would mean using a level one header for his entire wartime service (the one with the narrative), and using a second level one header for his history with the Landreich - something like "Service History with the Landreich Navy", to justify a sparse tone. | |||
: But that's a moot point. I was thinking of an earlier revision for some reason (or possibly Doomsday's article, where that sort of thing might be worthwhile). The actual article as of right now looks fine. I'm not really sure if you can do anything more with it, given the way False Colors is written. - [[User:Bob McDob|Bob]] 16:43, 20 August 2010 (CDT) | |||
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Wedge this is ready for you to polish.
In the Baka Kar section that is time stamp entries, I'm thinking we just leave it as is and not create additional narrative text. What does everybody else think about it? I'd only add text if it needs to be made clearer or an important or interesting event was overlooked. --Dundradal 18:02, 19 August 2010 (CDT)
There wasn't much to do, it seems to flow quite well. I put the time entries in point form, but if you don't like it, I suppose it can go without them. - Wedge
Yeah I wasn't sure what to do in that section. The Doomsday article is the same way...The bullets work, it at least makes the section more visually appealing. I just didn't want to have to craft a narrative to explain the events when simple time stamps work just as well. --Dundradal 13:20, 20 August 2010 (CDT)
- I'm not really opposed to it, but maybe the minute-by-minute AAR-type breakdowns should be split into either another section or a seperate article. - Bob 15:44, 20 August 2010 (CDT)
Another section? I'm not sure what you mean. It's already separated into the event it occurs (Baka Kar). It's the breakdown of what Bear does during the battle. I wouldn't want to create another article just for it to show what he was doing when it can be effectively displayed here. Is that what you meant or did I misunderstand? --Dundradal 16:26, 20 August 2010 (CDT)
- I was thinking of seperating it into another heading section - you're using level 2 headers for the whole article, so that would mean using a level one header for his entire wartime service (the one with the narrative), and using a second level one header for his history with the Landreich - something like "Service History with the Landreich Navy", to justify a sparse tone.
- But that's a moot point. I was thinking of an earlier revision for some reason (or possibly Doomsday's article, where that sort of thing might be worthwhile). The actual article as of right now looks fine. I'm not really sure if you can do anything more with it, given the way False Colors is written. - Bob 16:43, 20 August 2010 (CDT)
