WC Animation Fan Project Script (Need Critique and Assistance!)

[dacis2]

but improve on your grammar, and please try to say things that sound like in WC


in the real military, that much chatter will get you killed

 

[TC]

Originally posted by dacis2
but improve on your grammar, and please try to say things that sound like in WC


in the real military, that much chatter will get you killed

A movie isn't the military... you need to have some amount of dialogue so you have some idea of the characters and a greater view of the scene...

 

[TCSTigersClaw]

Well,I found it good....But about the names......too many "Marshalls"

 

[Cam]

Originally posted by dacis2
but improve on your grammar, and please try to say things that sound like in WC


in the real military, that much chatter will get you killed

That's made to sound like a news report like you would hear on CNN or something, not military chatter.

Oh and about the "Marshall" thing, I did that by accident. Heheh whoops. I better fix that.

 

[dacis2]

fine fine, not PERFECT english. just make it sound... "right"


post the completed dialouge when you have recorded, willya? I'm sure we all want to hear it.

 

[Cam]

Originally posted by dacis2
post the completed dialouge when you have recorded, willya? I'm sure we all want to hear it.

You mean the audio or you mean the completed script?

 

[dacis2]

audio

 

[TCSTigersClaw]

Well,post them the same time.....no big deal

 

[Cam]

That's a frigging load of audio I'd be posting!!!

 

[dacis2]

read:

I
have
D
S
L

 

[TC]

That's nice

 

[dacis2]

thanks!

 

[Cam]

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